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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the unemployment rate of Australians in 2012.
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, It can be seen that the number of people who did not work in rural
areas
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 is higher than in urban
areas
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. There was a decline
of
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in
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 unemployed inhabitants in villages,
however
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, for the cities it was the opposite during the period of time.
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 with, the figure of jobless citizens in rural
areas
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, which was almost 7%, had a dramatic decline and reached the lowest point (less than 5%) by the end of the second quarter. For the next two quarters, there were some fluctuations and the number of unemployed people accounted for 5%.
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, urban
areas
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’ rate of workless residents began from just over 2% and had a sharp growth over half a year.
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 number decreased to the previous point during three months and for the remaining time, it rose and hit a peak of approximately 5%, which was almost the same as for the rural
areas
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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