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Personal Development is the base for professional development and advancing in one's career. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#development #base #career
Personality
enchancement
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enhancement
 is the key to career
development
 and
achiveing
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achieving
 your professional goal in career, To some extent, I agree with
this
 point as without your personal growth and exposure it is really hard to be
sucessful
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successful
 in future as you can be not aware of your surroundings and people around you. Your
development
 starts from the time when you are young and not mature. In my
opinion
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 the first place to learn something is your home, where you get an idea of how to talk and sit properly from your family members and parents. We can count these as the baby steps towards personality building as these are the basics for any person or child. Moving on to the second phase,
School's
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School
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 play a vital role
through-out
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throughout
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 your education years and
lay's
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 the foundation
to
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for
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 your
development
,
where
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apply
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they
tought
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teach
 you about your conversational skills and your delivery as well which includes your voice pitch and tone and helps you build confidence to conduct meetings, plan and organise project. All these little things contribute a lot to your professional
development
, where you can prove yourself and what you have learned through out your life cycle in my opinion your personal
development
 never stops as you will be always learning something new from the situations and people around you which will always contribute to your professional
development
.
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