THE USE OF MOBILE PHONES IS AS ANTISOCIAL AS SMOKING. SMOKING IS BANNED IN ERTAIN PLACES SO MOBILE PHONE SHOULD BE BANNED LIKE SOKING. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.
Nowadays,
people
are addictive
to their mobile Replace the word
addicted
phones
and use
of mobile Correct article usage
the use
phones
in public is also
same
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the same
type
of social problem as compare
to smoking. In both Wrong verb form
compared
situation
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situations
that
are addictive and Correct pronoun usage
they
type
of unusual things
for the social life
of human being
.
I would say that Fix the agreement mistake
beings
people
are over
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overuse
use
their mobile phone
in Fix the agreement mistake
phones
type
of addictive way. Add an article
the type
a type
people
are forgot
to live in reality, like Change the verb form
forget
enjoy
and Wrong verb form
enjoying
feel
surrounding Wrong verb form
feeling
things
or nature.mobile phones
are makes
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make
people
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people's
life
virtual.people
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People
are forgot
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forget
to
some basic social Change preposition
apply
things
that they do before coming of
mobile Change preposition
off
phones
.somehow
, that will Capitalize word
Somehow
effect
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affect
on
different Change preposition
apply
age-group’s
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age-groups
people
like children ,adults etc.that
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That
affects
are worst than we think about social Correct your spelling
effects
life
.
Furthermore
, I think we should be
restrict Unnecessary verb
apply
daily
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the daily
uses
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use
mobile
Change preposition
of mobile
phones
.because now days
we can face many circumstances in our social Correct the word
nowadays
life
cause
of mobile Correct your spelling
because
phones
.circumstances like, children are forgot
to play with their friends and Wrong verb form
forgetting
also
they will be busy on
their virtual world of mobile Change preposition
in
phones
.people
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People
are
forgotten about social interaction with family and friends.Verb problem
have
people
are so busy Capitalize word
People
in
Change preposition
with
use
of mobile Correct article usage
the use
phones
, that makes their social life
very lonely and unenergetic.i
would say that we have to prohibit Change the capitalization
I
use
of mobile Add an article
the use
phones
in the
social places.like we have to stop using mobile Correct article usage
apply
phone
during we spend time with our family and friends and we have to set Fix the agreement mistake
phones
limit
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limits
of
screen time Change preposition
on
of
mobile Change preposition
on
phones
.that makes easy
to reduce the overuse of mobile Correct pronoun usage
it easy
phones
.
However
,I would say that cellular devices are really helpful for work and make easier life
for humans.smart phones
are grateful for many things
like calling and other useful apps available.that
are Correct pronoun usage
They
also
thankful for reaching out people
in Change preposition
to people
emergency
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an emergency
situation
.Fix the agreement mistake
situations
these
are Capitalize word
These
a
merit points of cellular devices in human Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
life
.
Summaries that in a way that
smart Correct word choice
apply
phone
are beneficial for some Correct your spelling
smartphones
type
of situation but on the other hand
there are more demerit pointes
of addictive Correct your spelling
points
use
of mobile phone
.so I would prefer that limited Fix the agreement mistake
phones
use
of smart phone
is beneficial but I should not prefer cellular devices for regular or social Fix the agreement mistake
phones
life
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