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tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other do you agree or disagree?

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tourism
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 in the world today is widely debated, others claim that it is indeed a force for international understanding.
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 personally accept
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 will explain why in
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 essay. Arguably, there could be reasons why
tourism
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 is crucially important.
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,
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 is sustainable developing day by day because not
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 people but
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 governments can make money,
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, if visitors visit
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another country
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, they can ameliorate their panache, in terms of culture or
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.
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, in
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countries
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, there are numerous traditional things
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 and
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 of items like weapons
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 foreigners can purchase these kinds of items for their families or
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.
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, the majority of
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, which may lead to
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 understanding
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 or
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each other,
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 meanings it is
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 superb option for
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 of learning modern
language
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. These range from
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English
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language
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 to
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the Russian
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Russian
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the Russian
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 as both of them are more common
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among
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tourism
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. Notwithstanding
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 of money or time, most individuals of
tourism
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, who
can
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 aware of
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history
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 of eclectic
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,
for instance
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the book "
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 of
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history
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" by George Thomson, who
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 teachers of
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also
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said that all teachers of
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 subject witnessed travel to overseas
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 for
history
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 purposes. In a nutshell, in spite of some downsides,
tourism
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 is
better
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 option for establishing relationships among
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 and
i
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 strongly believe that
tourism
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 brings merely benefits to our life

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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion.
lexical resource
Use more precise and academic language.
grammatical range accuracy
Check the grammar and sentence structure.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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