The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives an overview of some changes in proportions for individuals who were born in urban, rural and
towns
inside and outside Australia in the period between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, by looking at the chart we will find the ratio of people who were born in cities outweighs the others who were born in rural areas and
towns
during
this
period,
in addition
to a notable increase by 2010. From the outset, in 1995 the percentage of births in cities was the highest inside and outside Australia.
While rural
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areas fell to a close second with a higher ratio for mortals who were born outside and the lowest ratio for
towns
.
Regarding
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In
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2010, the rate of Australian births is increased by about 15% more, with 20% for people who
born
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were born
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in foreign places.
On the contrary
, the numbers in rural areas are dramatically decreased to making up less than 20% equally with
towns
for people who were born in and less than it for outside births
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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