The diagrams below show the result of a survey from Taiwan explaining how students wanting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998 - 2008.

The diagrams below show the result of a survey from Taiwan explaining how students wanting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998 - 2008.
The given table compares survey results conducted in Taiwan on how female and male students are willing to pursue education abroad in eight different categories over one decade between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
, ranking,
cost
of tuition, and
cost
of accommodation gave the highest scores in both years. Meanwhile, the quality of teachers and modern teaching methods is the lowest.
Moreover
, the ratings of tuition fees and location rose throughout the given period. In 1998, people considered, in ranking, the
cost
of tuition and the
cost
of accommodation as the highest, between 88% and 100%.
In contrast
, the quality of tutors was rated by women and men at only 5% and 13%, respectively.
Similarly
, modern teaching techniques rate between 5% and 8%. Turning to 2008, the most significant changes were seen in the ranking. It decreased significantly in women by 10%, from 100% to 90%.
Likewise
, in men, it slightly decreased to 95%.
Although
facilities in teaching, teacher quality, and accommodation fees were dropped from the male’s perspectives to 42%, 6%, and 86%, respectively, women rated higher than that in the previous year by 2–4%.
Additionally
, both fellows and girls were more likely to consider student loans and locality
at the end
of the year by 9% and 14%, respectively.
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