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in most of the countries, people prefer to live in rented appartment rather than buying a home? what are the advantages and disadvantages of iving in rented accomodation?

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The line graph illustrates the dynamic of the crime rate in the inner city of Newport between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, the city experienced a significant downward trend in the
number
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 of
burglaries
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,
while
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other
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the other
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 two reviewed crimes — cat theft and robbery — remained constant with slight fluctuations. Looking into the details, burglary had been a
dominated
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 crime from 2003 to 2006, with the largest
number
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 of incidents at approximately 3700 in 2004.
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, the
number
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 of
burglaries
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 dramatically decreased to just over 1000 incidents in 2008,
became
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 the second
offense
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on
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 terms of frequency.
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, over the 4 subsequent years, the
number
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 of
burglaries
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 did not exceed 1500. With regard to car thefts, the lowest
number
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 of them was witnessed in 2006
made
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 up around 2000 incidents.
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, car thefts
then
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 demonstrated a gradual upward trend, overtook
burglaries
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 and returned to the start point at around 3700 in 2012
as well as
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 at the beginning of the given period.
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A similar
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 pattern was experienced by robberies: the
number
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 of thefts from
the
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a
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 person fluctuated, with the lowest point at 500 in 2008, but ended at the initial level at slightly above 500.
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