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The line graph illustrates the dynamic of the crime rate in the inner city of Newport between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, the city experienced a significant downward trend in the
number
 of
burglaries
,
while
other
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 two reviewed crimes — cat theft and robbery — remained constant with slight fluctuations. Looking into the details, burglary had been a
dominated
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 crime from 2003 to 2006, with the largest
number
 of incidents at approximately 3700 in 2004.
However
, the
number
 of
burglaries
 dramatically decreased to just over 1000 incidents in 2008,
became
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 the second
offense
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on
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 terms of frequency.
In addition
, over the 4 subsequent years, the
number
 of
burglaries
 did not exceed 1500. With regard to car thefts, the lowest
number
 of them was witnessed in 2006
made
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 up around 2000 incidents.
Nevertheless
, car thefts
then
 demonstrated a gradual upward trend, overtook
burglaries
 and returned to the start point at around 3700 in 2012
as well as
 at the beginning of the given period.
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 pattern was experienced by robberies: the
number
 of thefts from
the
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a
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 person fluctuated, with the lowest point at 500 in 2008, but ended at the initial level at slightly above 500.
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