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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These charts depict the selling amount of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in five European nations during 1999 and 2004. The sales of coffee in these regions all increased, especially in
UK
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, which dramatically raised from 1.5 to 20 million
of
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euros. Meanwhile, in Switzerland,
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sales in 2004(6)
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the
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one
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in 1999(3).
By contrast
, the numbers related to Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden grew slightly by 0.2 to 0.7, which
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 under 2 in 2004. In comparison,
although
 the
overall
 trade quantity of bananas surged from 1999 to 2004, the selling situation showed a wide difference with coffee. Switzerland is the biggest bananas-consuming country in the five, 15 in 1999 and 47 in 2004, which are over the total amount of other countries in both years.
In addition
, the growths in
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 and Belgium are similar, 1 to 5.5 and 0.6 to 4 respectively.
Conversely
, both Sweden’s and Denmark’s sales
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 a 50%-drop from 1.8 and 2. In the 5 years, the trading volume of two agricultural products all increased. And it is worth
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 that the residents from
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the UK
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 and Sweden purchased more
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of these
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 goods than others.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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