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ın many work places online communication has overtaken face-to-face meetings. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in many business places online communication has overtaken
face to
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face
meetings
. That’s a paramount issue
that is
 getting worse and worse for people. A significant amount of working people
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this
 issue
due to
 the
workplaces
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.
Face to
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face
meetings
 and online
meetings
has
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 several pros and cons which are discussed below.I strongly believe that online
meetings
 are easier than
face to
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face
meetings
. To kick things off,
first
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 advantage of online
meeting
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meetings
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 is since you enter
meetings
 online there is no need to prepare your clothes.
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 when my father attends
online
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an online
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 meeting he just wears a shirt and
do
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 his meeting.
Therefore
 the second advantage is you do not need to get up early if your meeting in 9
am
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a.m.
 and
its
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it is
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 not online you ought to get up
in
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 7 am
however
 if your meeting is online you can wake up
in
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 8.30 am.
In addition
 to
this
, if someone’s meeting in a different city or a different country it makes much more sense to do it online
instead
 of going there
On the other hand
,
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face
meetings
 are generally more productive since if your internet connection is cut off at home or there is someone in the house that means that it will always be noise. In conclusion, the major differences,
while
 it is faster and easier to do online
meetings
but
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it can be much easier to understand the other people in
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