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Band 4.5

Write a letter to the Airline that you have lost bag in the plane and requesting to find the bag?

#airline #bag #plane
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I am writing with regard to the American Airline I travelled from
Newyork
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New York
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 to Paris
on
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apply
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last
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 Tuesday. There is
major
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a major
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issues
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issue
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 which I addressing
you
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with you
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 my
bag
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has been
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was
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 lost on 21st of September and the day was Tuesday . I was travelling from
Newyork
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New York
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 to Paris on the American
Airline
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Airlines
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 and the flight number is AA 227689. I was so tired and I didn't remember I carried out my
bag
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. When I went
to
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home
then
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 I
reliased
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realised
 that I
have
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had
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 lost my
bag
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. The specification of my
bag
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it
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is it
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 has
pink
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a pink
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color
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colour
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 with 2 back side stripes and a small black zip on the front left side. It has my personal documents in
their
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there
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specially
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 my identity card and my office keys. I remember that when
the
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I was leaving the plane I did not carry out my
bag
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 and I
was forget
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forgot
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on
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in
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 the cabin I am requesting you to please find my
bag
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 as soon as possible.
Then
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I
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it
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 will be easier to travel
in
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to
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other country
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another country
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. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as have received my letter. Yours Faithfully, Rubina Arshad
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical organization of your letter by providing a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use an appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or topic. Avoid merging multiple ideas into one paragraph.
task achievement
Ensure that you provide enough information about your lost bag, such as the date, flight number, and description, to help the airline find it.
task achievement
Use a more formal and polite tone throughout the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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