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You have spare room in your flat and you want to rent it to a student. Write a letter to the accommodation office of the local college. In your letter Explain Where your flat is? Why you want to rent it? What sort of person would like to rent it?

#room #rent #student #accommodation #office #college #sort #person
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter with the intent of renting out one bedroom one bath in my apartment from 1st November. I am John residing in Hills Suite apartment unit number 2 near the B.C college. The apartment is situated two blocks from the Husky gas station in Brampton, ON, Canada. Just to let you know, I was
also
Arts
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an Arts
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 and Humanity student of B.C college and know the crowd of our college. The purpose
behind
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for
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to rent
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renting
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other
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another
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 room in my flat is because
,
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apply
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 my flatmate is moving to another city
due to
change
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a change
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of
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in
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 his job and he can’t travel daily from one city to another.
Moreover
, another reason is,
rent
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that rent
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 is quite high and is not possible for me to pay the whole amount by myself. It will be really helpful if you can refer a student specifically male as it will be tough to manage with
female
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females
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. I am looking for a person who is generous, knows about cooking and cleaning
also
 willing to pay 1000 dollars per month. It will include all utilities plus
WIFI
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a WIFI
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 connection. Kindly advertise the post on the Newsletter board to get a quick response. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours Sincerely, John
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coherence cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and provides enough supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure and organization of the letter by using headings or subheadings.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal greeting and closing for a letter to the accommodation office.
task achievement
Ensure that all aspects of the prompt are addressed in the letter.
task achievement
Provide more specific information about the location of the flat.
task achievement
Avoid making assumptions or generalizations about the suitable renter.
grammatical range accuracy
Check the grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity.
grammatical range accuracy
Use a more formal and academic writing style.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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