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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serous social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Being
 in a nation where you are required to speak a foreign language can lead to social issues
as well as
 important challenges in day-to-day life. I believe that
this
 can be a stressful experience. Some of my reasons will be explored in the remainder of
this
 essay. The main challenge for
people
 to migrate could be solving issues related
with
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 the administrative processes.
Firstly
, in many
countries
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countries,
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 the documentation is written in the official languages that for the majority of nations not involve English. What is more, the issues related to migration regulation
is
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are
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 the first wall that
people
 need to overcome after arriving in a new country.
For instance
, my friend Richard
traveled
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 to Germany and after
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he arrieved
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arrieved
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arrived
 he needed the help of lawyers for the migration
process
 because he did not speak German with fluency. Clearly, the administrative
process
 could be a major issue for nonnative speakers Other in important point is social integration.
To begin
 with, when individuals relocate to a new country could feel social isolation and
this
 phenomenon can increase if in
new
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 location
it
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they
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 need to speak a different language.
For example
, when my colleague Jose Luis
traveled
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 from Mexico to a remote village in Tanzania, he had problems communicating with local
people
 and
as a
result
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 my colleague became isolated and had depression. So, if
people
 have problems with communicating with others is hard to create new relationships in the new
pleace
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place
.
Also
, simple actions like taking the bus may be difficult in a nation where a different dialect is spoken. In conclusion, moving to other countries where you have to speak a foreign language is an interesting
process
 that can expand the boundaries for individuals, but I admit that
this
process
 may implicate stressful moments.
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