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The plans below shows the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The plans illustrate how the site of Southwest Airport
look
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 like in the current situation and in the future transformation.
Overall
, the number of terminals will increase, which will be reflected by the area’s augmentation in size.
In addition
, the walkway will be replaced by a sky train and new facilities will
also
 be made. Currently, there are 8 airport gates where people must use the walkway facility to hop from one gate to
another ones
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.
Furthermore
, there is only 1 entrance in the
departure
room
 and the arrivals
room
 respectively. In the
departure
room
,
check-in
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the check-in
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 site is located
in
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across
of
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from
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 a café. After
the
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apply
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next
year
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 redevelopment, there will be 18 airport terminals and the size of
this
 area will increase.
Sky
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A sky
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 train will be provided to connect these terminals.
Moreover
, there will be 2 entrances for both the
departure
room
 and the arrivals
room
. There will be a new bag drop facility and shops in the
departure
 building. The arrivals building will
also
 have new facilities,
such
 as ATM, café, and car hire.
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