The table shows information about department stores and online stores in Australia in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given chart compares four criteria namely number of businesses, profit, sales revenue and growth between Australia physical
stores
and Internet-based stores
in 2011.
Overall
, it can obviously be seen that while
all the figures for e-shops were higher than those for department Correct word choice
apply
stores
. The rates of general growth of two
types of Correct article usage
the two
stores
were approximately equivalent
The number of businesses of
online Change preposition
apply
stores
was 368, nearly five times higher than the figure for outlets with 67. Although
there was a huge gap between the number of businesses, the profit of both did not have much difference, with 807 AUD
for offline stores
and 863 AUD
for online ones.
It can be concluded that the physical stores
had higher efficiency compared with the online boutiques. In 2011, the former earned 12700 AUD
dollars while
the latter yielded 13400 AUD
dollars, not too much difference.Submitted by nn.dieuquynh on
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