The pie chart shows the reasons why the young people don't do sport. write at least 150 words.

The pie chart shows the reasons why the young people don't do sport. write at least 150 words.
Young people tend to engage in less physical activity as illustrated vividly by several factors in the pie chart. The main reason is the lack of time limits to their opportunity to do sports, accounting for 40%.
Beside
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, the interest and desire
for participating
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to participate
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in sporting activities of the motivation plays a crucial role
to urge
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in urging
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the
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apply
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people to take part in certain physical activities, in
this
case, a third of young people do not enjoy
sport
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sports
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. The proportions of individuals preferring to
other
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do other
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things and remaining those
aren't
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who aren't
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fit to do sports are accounted sequentially for 12% and 10%.
Finally
, the final reason
occupies
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that occupies
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the lowest rate (at 5%)
that
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is that
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it's too expensive.
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