The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years

The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years
The line graph illustrates the
population
of three
counties
, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60
years
, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest
population
of three
counties
in 60
years
.
Overall
, amount of people in all of
this
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these
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counties
get
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gets
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larger and
provide
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provides
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brilliant results
however
each
counties
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county
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has an individual indicator
in
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apply
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every single year. By 1970, at the start of the period, Washington`s
population
had grown from 75,000 to 120,000.
Moreover
, by 2000,
this
growing
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grew
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dramatically to about twice as much 240,000. It is in fact like increasing to 200%. From 1970 to 2000, in 30
years
it is the peaked result. The lowest
population
is in Columbia, in 2000 their difference with Washington is approximately 165,000. In every year Washington`s
population
was more than twice
than
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that
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Columbia`s
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of Columbia`s
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.
The
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In the
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years
between 1940 and 1970 the populations of Yamhill and Columbia
moves
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moved
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slightly up
then
to 2000 it
rises
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rose
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exactly the same 45,000.
On the other hand
, it is
furthermore
similarly
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as
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to
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the
rise
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rising
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percent
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per cent
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of
the
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apply
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Washington`s index.
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