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The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years

The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years
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The line graph illustrates the
population
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 of three
counties
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, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60
years
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, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest
population
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 of three
counties
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 in 60
years
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.
Overall
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, amount of people in all of
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this
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these
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counties
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get
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gets
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 larger and
provide
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provides
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 brilliant results
however
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 each
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counties
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county
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 has an individual indicator
in
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apply
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every single year. By 1970, at the start of the period, Washington`s
population
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 had grown from 75,000 to 120,000.
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, by 2000,
this
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growing
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grew
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 dramatically to about twice as much 240,000. It is in fact like increasing to 200%. From 1970 to 2000, in 30
years
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 it is the peaked result. The lowest
population
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 is in Columbia, in 2000 their difference with Washington is approximately 165,000. In every year Washington`s
population
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 was more than twice
than
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that
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Columbia`s
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of Columbia`s
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.
The
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In the
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years
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 between 1940 and 1970 the populations of Yamhill and Columbia
moves
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moved
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 slightly up
then
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 to 2000 it
rises
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rose
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 exactly the same 45,000.
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, it is
furthermore
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similarly
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similar
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as
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to
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 the
rise
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rising
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percent
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per cent
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 of
the
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apply
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Washington`s index.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, counties, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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