The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years
The line graph illustrates the
population
of three counties
, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years
, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population
of three counties
in 60 years
.
Overall
, amount of people in all of this
Correct determiner usage
these
counties
get
larger and Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
provide
brilliant results Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
however
each counties
has an individual indicator Change to a singular noun
county
in
every single year.
By 1970, at the start of the period, Washington`s Change preposition
apply
population
had grown from 75,000 to 120,000. Moreover
, by 2000, this
growing
dramatically to about twice as much 240,000. It is in fact like increasing to 200%. From 1970 to 2000, in 30 Wrong verb form
grew
years
it is the peaked result. The lowest population
is in Columbia, in 2000 their difference with Washington is approximately 165,000. In every year Washington`s population
was more than twice than
Correct word choice
that
Columbia`s
.
Change preposition
of Columbia`s
The
Change preposition
In the
years
between 1940 and 1970 the populations of Yamhill and Columbia moves
slightly up Wrong verb form
moved
then
to 2000 it rises
exactly the same 45,000.Wrong verb form
rose
On the other hand
, it is furthermore
similarly
Change the word
similar
as
the Change preposition
to
rise
Change the verb form
rising
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
the
Washington`s index.Remove the article
apply
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