The graph shows the increase in population of three counties Colunbia, Yamhill and Washington in the U.S. state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. These three lines experienced an upward tendency, where the highest population was recorded in Washington.

The graph shows the increase in population of three counties Colunbia, Yamhill and Washington in the U.S. state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. These three lines experienced an upward tendency, where the highest population was recorded in Washington.
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The graph shows the increase in
population
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the population
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of
three
counties
Colunbia
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Columbia
,
Yamhill
and
Washington
in the U.S. state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. These
three
lines experienced an upward tendency, where the highest
population
was recorded in
Washington
. In 1940,
Columbia
had the lowest
population
of the
three
counties, at around 25,000.
This
compared with about
seventy five
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seventy-five
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thousand
in
Washington
. Between 1940 and 1970
population
of
Yamhill
and
Columbia
rosed gradually.
Moreover
, there had been
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a
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remarkable increase in the
numbers
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number
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of people in
Yamhill
in that period.
However
, in the next
three
decades
population
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the population
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of
Washington
climbed sharply and
rised
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raised
rise
rose
from
125.000
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125,000
to over 240
thousand
in 2000.
Further more
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Furthermore
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, there
had been
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a slight difference between
Columbia
and
Yamhill
in 1940,
however
after 60 years
Yamhill
had around ninety
thousand
people. In comparison,
Columbia
lagged behind by 14thousand, in 2000,so
Columbia
's
population
had at approximately 76.000.
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