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The graph shows the increase in population of three counties Colunbia, Yamhill and Washington in the U.S. state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. These three lines experienced an upward tendency, where the highest population was recorded in Washington.

The graph shows the increase in population of three counties Colunbia, Yamhill and Washington in the U.S. state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. These three lines experienced an upward tendency, where the highest population was recorded in Washington.
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The graph shows the increase in
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population
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the population
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 of
three
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 counties
Colunbia
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Columbia
,
Yamhill
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 and
Washington
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 in the U.S. state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. These
three
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 lines experienced an upward tendency, where the highest
population
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 was recorded in
Washington
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. In 1940,
Columbia
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 had the lowest
population
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 of the
three
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 counties, at around 25,000.
This
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 compared with about
seventy five
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seventy-five
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thousand
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 in
Washington
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. Between 1940 and 1970
population
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 of
Yamhill
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 and
Columbia
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 rosed gradually.
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, there had been
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a
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remarkable increase in the
numbers
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number
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 of people in
Yamhill
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 in that period.
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, in the next
three
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 decades
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population
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the population
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 of
Washington
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 climbed sharply and
rised
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raised
rise
rose
 from
125.000
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125,000
 to over 240
thousand
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 in 2000.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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, there
had been
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was
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 a slight difference between
Columbia
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 and
Yamhill
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 in 1940,
however
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 after 60 years
Yamhill
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 had around ninety
thousand
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 people. In comparison,
Columbia
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 lagged behind by 14thousand, in 2000,so
Columbia
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's
population
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 had at approximately 76.000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, three, yamhill, washington, columbia, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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