Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring bout a change. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Human beings
created
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lots of disturbance to the
environment
all over the globe including different kinds of pollution. These impacts not only harmed the survival of
plants
and
animals
, it is
also
crucial for the living of human in the future.
Thus
, measures should be implemented to tackle
with
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the existing environmental problems. The rapid economic
development
all over the
world
brought many harmful impacts
to
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the
environment
. Controversies
rose
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whether
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about whether
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the current polluted
environment
could be improved by
human
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humans
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. For people
being
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pessimistic
on
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the existing situation,
it
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is understandable. Especially for the developing
countries
, they are now focusing on
the
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industrial
development
as their main economic pillar. Undoubtedly, factories producing different goods brought massive pollution to the
environment
.
Greenhouse
gases
such
as carbon dioxide and methane are common in
the
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factory production. The surge in the amount of atmospheric
greenhouse
gases intensified the
greenhouse
effect, as a
reuslt
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result
, speeding up global warming. Global warming led to increasing sea
level
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levels
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and the
losing
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of
animals
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habitats. Developing
countries
with low technological level comparatively couldn't easily give up industrial
development
as every country in the
world
are competing for the economy to gain
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international presence. It is difficult for them to
sacrfice
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sacrifice
their economic
development
to protect the
environment
.
Secondly
, other than industrial
development
, urbanization around the
world
is currently
in
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an unprecedented rate. The rise in the
world
's population increased the land demand for
accomodation
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accommodation
. With limited flat land in some cities, reclamation and
developing
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the
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country parks became an option for the governments to increase land supply.
However
, reclamation
causest
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causes
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irreversible damage to
the
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marine
lives
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life
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, poisoning
sea water
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and increasing ocean turbidity. Developing country parks, which were originally the relatively safer place for
animals
to escape to would have their habitat directly destroyed. Deforestation and reclaiming rivers
kills
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plants
and
animals
. The ecosystem breaks down immediately. Some people think it is possible to adopt measures to tackle
with
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the aforementioned harms made to the
environment
. In the contemporary society, sustainable
development
is upheld. Different
countries
no matter rich or poor began to cooperate in resolving the environmental crises. New technology in industrial production is adopted. Polluted water is cleaned before
dumping
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into the ocean
while
pollutants
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filters
is
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installed in factories.
New
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reclamation method is used to minimize the effect brings to the ocean.
Countries
over the
world
came together to sign different agreements
in
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on
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greenhouse
gases
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gas
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emissions and pollution control to limit the impact
to
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on
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the
environment
.
To conclude
, for decades,
human
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humans
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begins
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kept making negative impacts
to
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on
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the
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plants
and
animals
while
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and
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we are now finding
the
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way
out
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to fix the problem. It is hoped that the introduction of new technology and phasing out polluting production
would
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be the future trend of the
world
.
Human
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cannot live without the
disapperance
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disappearance
of
plants
and
animals
.
Ecosystem
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should be sustained for the continuity of both the
environment
and
human
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humans
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.
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