The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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about the proportion of the population of four countries in Asia from 1970 until 2020, and extra future predictions in 20 upcoming years. In general, there are three increasing trends and one slight fluctuating trend displayed in one diagram describing the

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of people living in cities. In the beginning, the highest

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, and the lowest

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Indonesia

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second place.

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the largest with just above 30% of

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country. Followed by Malaysia, with around 29% of its total

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started around 2-3% lower than Thailand with approximately 18% of

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. After 1990,

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experienced a decent trend until 2010, and

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three countries performed increasing trends.

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, Thailand showed just a slight climb.

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, in the future, Malaysia is predicted will be in the first place in

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with almost 85% of its total

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just above 60% of

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will be living in urban

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in 2040.

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is predicted with 3-5% higher than Thailand with just around 53% of its total population in 2040.

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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Some people think that manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is more important to focus on the future rather than the present. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss, including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

nowadays, more and more people from different cities are spending more time away from their families. what are the possible reasons and the effects on the people themselves and their families?

Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Some people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why is this? Do you think the government should spend more money supporting the local film industry?