The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The graph provides
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about the proportion of the population of four countries in Asia from 1970 until 2020, and extra future predictions in 20 upcoming years. In general, there are three increasing trends and one slight fluctuating trend displayed in one diagram describing the
percentations
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perceptions
presentations
of people living in cities. In the beginning, the highest
populations
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was in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, and the lowest
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in
Indonesia
.
However
, in the future, Malaysia's
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will
outweighed
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other
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three countries
while
Indonesia
will
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up in
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second place.
To begin
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in In1970
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In1970
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in 1970
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the Phillipines
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Phillipines
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Philippines
populations
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population
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who
live
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in the city
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the largest with just above 30% of
total
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the total
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populations
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population
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in
this
country. Followed by Malaysia, with around 29% of its total
populations
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population
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.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
Indonesia
started around 2-3% lower than Thailand with approximately 18% of
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the total
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populations
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population
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. After 1990,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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experienced a decent trend until 2010, and
then
started to rise again. Despite the falling of Philipinnes
populations
,
other
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three countries performed increasing trends.
However
, Thailand showed just a slight climb.
Moreover
, in the future, Malaysia is predicted will be in the first place in
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of
populations
with almost 85% of its total
populations
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population
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.
Following
this
,
Indonesia
is estimated
with
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just above 60% of
total
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the total
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populations
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population
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will be living in urban
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places
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in 2040.
In addition
,
Philippones
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Philippines
is predicted with 3-5% higher than Thailand with just around 53% of its total population in 2040.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words populations, indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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