In some countries, the government pays for health care. In others, the individual must pay for their own health care. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of each system.
Social security has been debated by not only economist but
their
citizens who have knowledge on security Rephrase
also their
basis
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based
of
economics Change preposition
on
also
that
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whether
this
welfare should be provided for everyone or not. From my perspective, I strongly partially of
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with
this
statement.
Firstly
, the
social security is supposed to be the basic welfare Correct article usage
apply
as well as
it is the appropriate way to improve our economic
and environment. To illustrate Replace the word
economy
further
, people
who is
living in uncomfortable circumstances has the potential to treatment Change the verb form
are
top ranked
hospital leading to not only reducing the cost of treatment but their citizens Add a hyphen
top-ranked
have
an opportunity to spend their money to improve their wealth or knowledge Unnecessary verb
apply
also
. In addition
, some countries, Thailand in particular
, which use this
solution called the 30 bath project, possible to improve the healthcare infrastructure casing
Thailand’s GDP at that time, Correct your spelling
causing
grew
higher than ever beforeChange the verb form
to grow
historical
.
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apply
Nonetheless
, despite the benefits above, it has various gigantic drawbacks that government
is supposed to be concerned Correct article usage
the government
significantly
. Change preposition
about significantly
For example
. Admittedly, in this
era, most countries absolutely became the
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an
aging-society
. Correct your spelling
ageing society
For
this
reason, the administration whose
operating Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
solution must intensively worry about a
number of elder Change the article
the
people
increasing in the foreseeable future, otherwise
, policymaker
will spend Fix the agreement mistake
policymakers
huge
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a huge
amount
of their financial resources Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
for
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on
people
in need, As a result
, their budget are
not Change the verb form
is
adequate
causing either the deficit budget or their credit rating will be downgraded by Change the adjective
adequately
credit
rating agency, namely the moody and standard&poor. Add an article
a credit
the credit
In addition
, this
policy is moral
hazard outstanding, as Correct article usage
a moral
people
who has
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have
this
welfare is not sufficiently take
care of Wrong verb form
taken
myself
causing society Correct pronoun usage
themselves
as well as
economic problem in the future.
To conclude
, this
method is the best way, in the case that, these countries not became
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did not become
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an aging
aging
state. Change the spelling
ageing
In
the other hand, Change preposition
On
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the involver
involver
must Fix the agreement mistake
involvers
concern
in Wrong verb form
be concerned
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
this
problem and their financial resources adequate
.Correct word choice
apply
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...