In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around?
In several communities more and more
people
do not have good relations with their neighbours and it is leading to a sense of community being lost. it is because people
have busy lifestyles and development
of technologies lots of Correct article usage
the development
people
use mobile and computers. Therefore
, we need to give priority to a more social life so that it can be measured to turn it around I will discuss it in the following paragraph below.
To begin
with, in most cities, people
are busy with their job
taking care of their family they have to earn money and to earn money nowadays so difficult to doa
9 to 5 daily Correct your spelling
do a
job
so that they need to do an extra part-
Correct the article-noun agreement
an extra part-time job
extra part-time jobs
time
jobs. For example
, I am doing part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
job
because what I earning from my current job
is not enough to fulfil my basic needs so I have to do an extra part-
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part-time
time
job
it help me to get my dream car and house which I have
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apply
plan
to buy. Change the article
the plan
In addition
, nowadays most people
do business to earn money and to increase business, they have to give all their time
so they do not have time
to talk and share thoughts with neighbours.
Secondly
, nowadays people
do not have free time
because technology have
offered lots of option to folk. most public Change the verb form
has
are
using mobile phones to watch movies, play games and make videos. Change the verb form
is
For example
, technology has given very good apps where people
can do whatever they want by sitting in their own comfortable rooms. Since specially
young Replace the word
especially
peoples
do not want to talk and gather with Fix the agreement mistake
people
people
around
. Correct pronoun usage
around them
However
, people
have their busy moment
they need to give some Fix the agreement mistake
moments
time
for a social lifestyle. For example
, they need to go out and talk and share thoughts with people
who live beside their house. We must have good relations with neighbours to help each other in emergency situations. We need to teach our children how to have good relations with society and what are the benefits of having relationships with communities.
In conclusion, we must keep in touch with our communities and help each other in hard situations as well as
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