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Communication and personality Some people fail at school but end up being successful in life.

#communication #personality #people #school #life
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In order to be
success
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successful
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, knowledge is important.
However
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, schools don’t teach us every
skills
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skill
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. Some skills that we have to learn from life too, and more experiences from life
people
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 will be more
successes
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successful
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.
Firstly
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, schools teach us all the same subjects, some
subject
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subjects
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 we find
them
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apply
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hard to adopt or unsuitable
with
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for
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 our ability.
According to
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 human
being
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beings
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, we
are
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have
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 our own
uniqe
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unique
strength
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strengths
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 but
also
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weakness
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weaknesses
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. So
fail
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failing
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 at
school
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 does not mean we have no opportunity to
success
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succeed
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.
Secondly
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,
School
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 still do not teach us
necessary
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the necessary
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 skill which we need in real life
such
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 as financial management,
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and leading
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leading
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leadership
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 skill. Some
people
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 do not at
school
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 but they learn these important skills
which is
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that
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supports
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 their career.
Thirdly
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,
People
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 do not stop learning and improving themselves after
school
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. They keep learning things on their own, doing
self education
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self-education
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. The world is always changing so
people
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learn
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who learn
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 to adapt
with
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to
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 current situations will get more opportunities to be wealthy.
To sum up
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. To be successful
need
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needs
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 many elements but
non stop
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non-stop
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 learning and improving ourselves is the key. As long as we try our best, we will be who we want sooner or later.
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