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the table bekow gives information about consumer spending on different items in fiev different countries in 2002.

the table bekow gives information about consumer spending on different items in fiev different countries in 2002.
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The table summarizes the
percent
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percentage
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 of expenditure on certain goods in six different
countries
like
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apply
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Ireland
, Italy,
Spain
, Sweden, and
Turkey
 in 2002.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the residents of all
countries
spent
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 a great amount of money
for
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on
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 food, beverages, and tobacco products.
Moreover
,
the
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a
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 minor
percent
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percentage
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had
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was
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 devoted
for
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to
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 education, especially
Spain
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in Spain
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 and
Ireland
.
To begin
 with,
Ireland
 devoted almost 30% and
Turkey
 32.14 per cent
for
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to
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meal
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meals
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, which were the leaders among
five
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the five
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countries
.
Furthermore
, Italy was the country, where residents
have
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had
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expended
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spent
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 much more money
for
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on
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 garments and footwear (9.00%). The minor
percent
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percentage
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 witnessed in
Spain
5.40
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was 5.40
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 per cent. The same statistics show
Turkey
 and
Ireland
 (nearly 7%). With regard to expenditure
of
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on
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 leisure and education which was the lowest percentage among
three
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the three
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 main items in all
countries
.
Turkey
 spent 4.35
percent
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per cent
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 of their finance.
Furthermore
, the same rate shows Italy and Sweden (3.22%). One interesting fact
that
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is that
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 consumers in
Spain
 have extended the lowest present of their money to these three goods.
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