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the table bekow gives information about consumer spending on different items in fiev different countries in 2002.

the table bekow gives information about consumer spending on different items in fiev different countries in 2002.
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The table summarizes the
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percent
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percentage
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 of expenditure on certain goods in six different
countries
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like
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apply
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Ireland
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, Italy,
Spain
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, Sweden, and
Turkey
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 in 2002.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the residents of all
countries
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spent
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 a great amount of money
for
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on
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 food, beverages, and tobacco products.
Moreover
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,
the
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a
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 minor
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percent
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had
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was
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 devoted
for
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to
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 education, especially
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Spain
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in Spain
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 and
Ireland
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.
To begin
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 with,
Ireland
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 devoted almost 30% and
Turkey
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 32.14 per cent
for
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to
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meal
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meals
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, which were the leaders among
five
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the five
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countries
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.
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, Italy was the country, where residents
have
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expended
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spent
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 much more money
for
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on
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 garments and footwear (9.00%). The minor
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percent
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percentage
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 witnessed in
Spain
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5.40
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was 5.40
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 per cent. The same statistics show
Turkey
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 and
Ireland
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 (nearly 7%). With regard to expenditure
of
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on
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 leisure and education which was the lowest percentage among
three
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the three
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 main items in all
countries
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.
Turkey
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 spent 4.35
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percent
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 of their finance.
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, the same rate shows Italy and Sweden (3.22%). One interesting fact
that
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is that
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 consumers in
Spain
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 have extended the lowest present of their money to these three goods.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, countries, ireland, spain, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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