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In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an argument that couples have equal responsibilities to earn in marriage. I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion. Because as human beings, men have more
strengths
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 and they have to
worries
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 about
being
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pregnancy so husbands are
soppossed
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supposed
 to earn more. The fact is men are born stronger so they can assess varied opportunities to get a job.
For example
, a man can work as a teacher but
also
 can work as a trainer, psychologist or even a chef, and they can work in almost any field. It is
obviously
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 husbands should provide more.
Moreover
, women have to deal with pregnancies
for
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 they
are not be
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 able to fully focus on their jobs, some even have to resign in order to take care of babies and families. How they can provide similar
earning
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 as husbands.
On the other hand
, women are born to
taking
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 care so for
happy
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a happy
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 ending, men should be providers and women
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don't
dont
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do not
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 have to earn much but take care of the
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family
famili
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families
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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