The diagrams below show the results of a survey from Taiwan explaining how students, wanting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998-2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The diagrams below show the results of a survey from Taiwan explaining how students, wanting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998-2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
The given table compares a survey conducted in Taiwan on how female and male students are willing to pursue education abroad in eight different categories over two decades between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
, ranking,
cost
of tuition, and
cost
of accommodation gave the highest scores in both years. Meanwhile, the quality of teachers and modern teaching methods is the lowest.
Moreover
, the ratings of tuition
fee
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and location rose throughout the given period. In 1998, people considered, in ranking, the
cost
of tuition and the
cost
of accommodation the highest, between 88% and 100%.
In contrast
, the quality of tutors was rated by women and men at only 5% and 13%, respectively.
Similarly
, modern teaching techniques rate between 5% and 8%. Turning to 2008, the most significant changes were seen in the ranking. It decreased significantly in women by 10%, from 100% to 90%.
Likewise
, in men, it slightly decreased to 95%.
Although
facilities in teaching,
teacher’s
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quality, and accommodation
fee
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were dropped from the male’s perspectives to 42%, 6%, and 86%, respectively, women rated higher than that in the previous year by 2–4%.
Additionally
, both fellows and girls were more likely to consider student loans and locality
at the end
of the year by 9% and 14%,
subsequently
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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