The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph gives information about the rate of closed and recently opened
shops
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for
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a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, there is a downward trend of
shops
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for both closures and openings. The
number
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of closed and opened
shops
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reached about
same
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the same
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point
at
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2014.
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the rate of new
shops
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decreased gradually between 2014 and 2018,
whereas
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closed
shops
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number
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started to increase dramatically from 2015 to 2018. With more details, the
number
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of closed and opened
shops
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decreased from 2011 to 2012. They both suddenly increased until 2014. There was a dramatic decrease
for
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the
number
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of shop
clousures
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closures
from 2014 to 2015. Closed
shops
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have
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experienced something
badly
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from 2015 to 2016,
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however
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however,
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the rate of shop openings
did
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not affected too much from something and went on a decrease.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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