Some people think that the use of computers in primary and secondary schools makes education more enjoyable and efficient, while others believe that too much dependence on computers causes both physical and emotional problems. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

The
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profitability
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modern society plays
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role. A few people believe that
computers
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education very easy and comfortable,
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others think that it causes some problems
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mental and happy life. I believe that
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an abundant benefits
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abundant benefits
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. To Commence with,
computers
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various sources to make study easy and comfortable. In
this
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,
teacher
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teachers
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can
use
different platforms for teaching. It is really a good way to
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to show
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some
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diagrams, and animations that
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attractive
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for students. To illustrate
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an example,
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good way to depict a big project, which includes a massive information and images.
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, using too much of
computers
makes students
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mental health. Sometimes, they become completely dependent on it and do not try to
use
their own mind.
As a result
, they lose their talent and become less productive day by day. To Cite an example, nowadays for a small calculation they
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because they think it's easy but at some
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they are becoming less active
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is not good for their mental health.
To Conclude
, utilizing
computer
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for schooling has
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vast benefits in every
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in
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this
modernization era but every
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limitation is good. If they
use
computers
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a
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purpose
then
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definitely
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resources
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for education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interactive learning
  • Educational technology
  • Personalized learning
  • Digital literacy
  • Student engagement
  • Health concerns
  • Social interaction
  • Overreliance
  • Distraction
  • Privacy concerns
  • Security issues
  • Eye strain
  • Physical health
  • Emotional well-being
  • Critical thinking
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