In some countries, more young adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Write at least 250 words.

In some countries, there has been and continues to be a trend among adults who have graduated and secured employment still living with their
parents
. There are both advantages and disadvantages to
this
situation.
However
,
personally
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the drawbacks are more than the benefits.  On the one hand, after graduation and no stable job, living with
parents
have
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many benefits.
First,
parents
who have readily available finance of help and support can help save
a
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amount of money
such
as rent and food.
Beside
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, they can easily take care of their
parents
and vice versa, their
parents
can
also
look after them when they catch the illness.
Morever
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Moreover
, living
toghether
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together
in the house can make family relationships even more intimate, they can understand each other better and they can
also
be a strong spiritual support for us when we encounter difficulties. Talking regularly with older
people
can help you gain more knowledge, experience and life
skill
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that can help your career and life. 
On the other hand
, the drawbacks of adults still living with
parents
overshadow its benefits.
First,
having multiple generations living
toghether
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together
cause disagreements.
For example
, In Asia,
parents
often have the notion that adults are usually “right” and their child should be the one to apologize even if the
parents
are in the wrong. And
people
in the older generation attach great importance to marriage, often urging their children to get married.
That is
also
one of the reasons why families quarrel.
Secondly
,
people
who stay with
parents
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are easy to live dependently on, because they don't need to pay attention to housework or food.
For instance
, When it comes time to move, they will have great difficulty managing their finances and spending. Not only that, living with
parents
will limit private space and be constrained by rules set by
parents
such
as not wearing skirts above the thighs or not going out past 10
p.m
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p.m.
and It can
also
limit our creativity.  In conclusion,
although
living with
parents
has both good and bad sides, I think young
people
will have some difficulty making decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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