Some young people decide to go to college or university as they believe that leads to the most successful career path. Others, however, chose to go straight to work as they think it is important to gain real life experience after high school. Discuss both views and write your opinion.

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college is crucial in order to get a degree that sometimes

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new doors in the

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future

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you to a more

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successful

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decide to

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after they graduate from high school. Even though both decisions can help you to construct a professional career, going to college is crucial to

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goal. Nowadays, young

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say it is better to start working as soon as possible so that you can gain

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and new contacts.

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why they choose to get a job,

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as a young person you can learn easily and quite fast.

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people

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to have a company choose to start their

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business

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on it, or

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for a company first to gain

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. For these

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the more

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they have, the easier will be to be successful.

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, it is clearly impossible to apply

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logic to every type of job. Some jobs require previous studies and without it, they wouldn't even exist.

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, any type of medical

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such

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doctors

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or dentist,

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other professions like architectures or lawyers require prior of many years of

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. They wouldn't be able to

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without their studies and even with them, sometimes is difficult to achieve a

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successful

posture.

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tend to

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that either going to university or working

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of studying can lead you to a

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successful position

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can be true, in my

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it is always better to find a balance and try to

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at the same time you study. So that you can gain

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but at the same time

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knew

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knowledge that can be useful in your professional career.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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Some young people decide to go to college or university as they believe that leads to the most successful career path. Others, however, chose to go straight to work as they think it is important to gain real life experience after high school. Discuss both views and write your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people believe that only employees who have worked at a company for a long time deserve to be promoted to a higher position. What is your opinion about this?

this rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvangtage?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming much wider, the rich richer, the poor even poorer. What problems can the situation cause and give the solution.