Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and hurts people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Commercial
advertisement
is an inseparable part of today's world. In that theme, we are submerged in them and
such
interactions cause some consequences, mainly not beneficial, for humans. Based on several reasons, I agree with
this
statement.
First,
ads are specially designed to stimulate our brains and affect our neural system, and
second,
the problem exists with the promoted
products
. These
products
are not necessarily healthy for children and adults. Advertisements have detrimental effects on our neural circuits. They are tailored to excite various brain parts to promote something at conscious and unconscious levels. In fact, science-based tools and scientific research are constantly leveraged to enhance neural excitement.
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,
for instance
, play a great role in the implication of some hidden message. Orange
color
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is utilized in many snack
advertisement
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in
favor
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of making viewers hungry and
crave
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the product.
Such
neural effects cause various issues, including but not restricted to mental fatigue, habitual change, and anxiety. The
products
, themselves, are not necessarily healthy or beneficial.
Although
in many countries authorities control what is being promoted, their standards are not exactly the healthiest. Fast foods, which have highly processed ingredients, take a great portion of the
advertisement
time. Body image, as another example, is a modern problem. Unfortunately, most of the fashion brands promote zero-size
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for women, and many female viewers around the world are pursuing it. Not only is it an unhealthy trend, at least for most
of
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women, but it has caused change in female aesthetics, too. In
this
regard, it is essential to understand the health threat of advertisements. In conclusion, I strongly side with the notion that over-exposure to
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has
detrimental
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a detrimental
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effect on our lives. Simply, because they are designed to, not necessarily in a positive way, affect our mental health, and
also
, the promoted
products
or services are not always healthy.
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