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It has been said that group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than activities done alone. Do you agree or disagree?

#group #team #activities #skills #life
Some
people
 believe that
group
 or
team
activities
 can teach more important
skills
 for
life
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than
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activities
 done alone. I do believe that it is significant to acquire essential
skills
 for
life
while
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working
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 together rather than completing the task alone. In
this
 globalisation era, it is inevitable that we need other
people
 in our daily
life
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lives
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. As a part of society,
work
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working
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 in a
team
 is a common activity that we do
everyday
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every day
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. It is undeniable that
group
activities
 should teach
people
 some important
skills
.
For example
, a
group
 of students has a
presentastion
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presentation
 in the class and a week before
presentation
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the presentation
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, each member of
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the teams
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teams
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team
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 is assigned to different roles by the leader. As a
results
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result
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,
alll
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all
groups member
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group members
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 might learn
much
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apply
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about crucial
skills
 for their
life
such
 as communication
skills
 that will be very helpful
while
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if
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 they want to give an opinion not only in
the
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apply
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school but
also
 in their society. On the other side, finishing the
assigments
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assignments
assignment
 only in
team work
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teamwork
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 might be
lack
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a lack
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 of experience. If a leader of a
team
 only
focus
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focuses
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 on how to finish the task
then
 there
is
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are
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 probably no opportunities to gain important
skills
.
For instance
, if the leader is the only one of
group
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the group
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 members
did
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who did
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 the task
then
 the rest of the
group
 teams might be jobless.
Consequently
, most of the
group
 members
has
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have
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 no chance to sharpen their
skills
.
That is
 the reason why, in a
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group
goup
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goup,
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 it is important to give all the members certain
role
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roles
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 in order to assist them in their daily
life
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lives
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 with important
skills
. In conclusion, having
activities
 done is important
however
 it is more important to gain more
skills
 for
life
.
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From
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 my perspective,
people
 can learn
about
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apply
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practical
skills
 for their
life
while
 they are still managing to complete the
group
activities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication skills
  • problem-solving
  • collaboration
  • conflict resolution
  • leadership
  • accountability
  • social connections
  • networks
  • adaptability
  • empathy
  • diverse personalities
  • real-world environments
  • team dynamics
  • group cohesion
  • interpersonal skills
  • delegation
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