You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements.

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I hope

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letter finds you in radiant health and the best of

spirit

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. I am writing

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crucial

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purpose of

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complaining

about I

belive

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that

this

cafe

very

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well among in

this

city cafe.Honestly, The menu needs to be updated. On the òne side first and important thing,I want

metioan

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mention

that the ambience in the cafeteria is very good.

Secondly

the

arangment

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arrangement

very

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comfortable.

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the location

worth

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mentioning as

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very easy to reach there.

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, there are some issues with the menu and

qualty

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quality

food

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. Most of the

food

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awesome. But some w dishes very bad. So not washed clean.

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this

bowl

is taste

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very bad.

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, having given the

proverious

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facts you will an immediate action.in forward to hearing from you in the near future.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements.

Fully explain your ideas

The cultures of many countries around the world becomes more similar than they used to be. What are the reasons for this trend? Is it positive or negative?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is a positive or nrgative development?

Some people think it is good to raise children in a city. Others argue that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

In some countrie , many people choosing to live alone than in the past. Do you think it is a positive or negative.