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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, with the augmentation of
people
 in the world, the ways of association have changed.
Such
 as using social media and forwarding texts that have replaced face-to-face meetings. It seems to me that the new communication methods are more acceptable than the old ones. And I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, communicating through the Internet and sending messages save
people
’s time and energy, So that everyone can be in contact with others and maintain their connection with communication applications.
For example
, before advanced
technology
, if a family's child studied in another country, the family had to travel to that country to see their child.
This
 leads to a loss of time, money, and energy,
while
 today programs like Skype and Google Meet make us forget the old methods for visiting and communicating. A second factor is the development of leading-edge
technology
 that makes it easier and faster for
people
 to communicate with each other anywhere in the world. It can be said its significance is profound as it allows us to send messages to any part of the world via email at the touch of a button
instead
 of writing a letter and sending it.
this
 breakthrough in
technology
 attracts
people
 to use it more and
people
 prefer to use face-to-face meetings less. It is true that there are some positives in new contacts via the Internet, but other
people
 believe that
this
 method does not convey real feelings. Despite
this
,
this
 thinking is related to the elderly since they are technophobes and afraid of modern
technology
.
To conclude
, keeping time, not consuming energy, and the convenience and fascination of new technologies for
people
 has made many
people
 stop using the old ways to meet and socialize.
This
 is not to say that no one does not use the face-to-face method, but it appears to be the case very frequently.
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