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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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generations
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,
people
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 have their own attitudes and behaviour.
This
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 matter causes diversity between older
individuals
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 who have traditional ideas and young
people
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 who have modern ideas. Indeed, older
people
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 want to guide others through their traditional mindsets on how to live.
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, a number of
people
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 say that the guide of older
individuals
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 can not be useful for youth. If I want to present my view, I would agree we can not use older
generations
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’ ideas for young
individuals
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, based on two reasons including the entrance of up-to-date technology in life,
as well as
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 the change of expectations and views of new
generations
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 compared to old
generations
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. Nowadays, technology is growing rapidly and it makes numerous cutting-edge devices and gadgets for improving
people
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’s lifestyles.
This
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 matter leads to young
people
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haveing
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 different lifestyles compared to bygone
individuals
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 since technology provides easier and faster amenities for them.
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, my grandmother prefers to use traditional cooking methods,
on the contrary
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, I tend to use modern devices
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 as microwaves.
On the other hand
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, the gap between
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 causes the various expectations and views of them. In fact,
this
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 diversity is
due to
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 the life conditions which have been changed in every generation.
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, life conditions, like
laws
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 and governments, are vital parameters in the behaviour and the thoughts of
people
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.
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, my grandmother lived in the Pahlavi age which had special
laws
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, and she grew up with
laws
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. So, the mentioned situations can influence her thinking and manner.
On the contrary
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, I live in a new age with different
laws
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. In summary, I believe that there are major differences between the attitudes and the manner of current
generations
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 and old
generations
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, based on the differences in their technological lifestyle,
as well as
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 the differences in expectations and views
due to
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laws
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 and governments.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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