The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

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The following graph shows the number of

incidents

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and

injuries

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per 100 million passenger miles

traveled

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travelled

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(PMT) by mode of transportation for the year 2002. It is clear from the chart that the mode of transportation with the lowest number of

incidents

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and

injuries

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is the commuter

rail

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and

then

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the other

hand

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we have the demand response

that is

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the one with the most

problems

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. In the commuter

rail

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, there are just 20

incidents

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and 17

injuries

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per 100 million

passenger

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passengers

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and in the

opposite

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we have the demand response with 225

incidents

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and 173

injuries

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Then

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we have other types of

trasnsports

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transports

transport

like heavy

rail

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, light

rail

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or the bus. So

next,

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focusing on

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this

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these

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3 other types, on the Heavy

rail

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there are a

litle

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little

bit more

problems

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than the

comumuter

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commuter

rail

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with 51

inccidents

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incidents

accidents

and 35

injuries

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have the light

rail

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, which is the one

that is

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positioned in the middle of the 5 types of transport with a sum of 115

problems

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and

lastly

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we have the bus with 142

problems

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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail, problems with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

179 words

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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

Some people believe that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outlook. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic: Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.