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the graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries

the graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries
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The line chart illustrates
global
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the global
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 expenditure
of
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on
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water
 in three sections from 1900 to 2000,
whereas
 the table compares
water
 use in Brazil and
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the Demratic
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Demratic
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Democratic
 Republic of Congo.
Overall
, the vast majority of
water
 was used in agriculture, whilst domestic expense was the lowest in the three sectors. The
water
 consumption in Brazil was superior to that in
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the
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Demratic
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Democratic
 Republic of Congo.
According to
 the information shown in the line graph, agriculture relied on
water
 the most in the given time which kept increasing from 500km³ to 3000km³.
Besides
, industrial consumption and domestic one had slight gaps until 1950. After a decade, the demand
of
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water
 in industry significantly
raised
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 and reached 1000km³ in 2000. In terms of the data revealed in the table, the population of Brazil in 2000 was 176 million and each person can consume 359 m³ of
water
while
 the irrigated land was 26500km².
On the other hand
,
water
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distribution
 per person in
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the Demratic
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Demratic
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Democratic
 Republic of Congo which had 5.2 million residents in 2000 was 8 m³ and the land of irrigation was 100km².
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