The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how much yearly
revenue
is
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was
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received by three different bakeries in Calgary from 2000 to 2010. Viewing from an
overall
perspective, it can be seen that the
revenue
of
Mari
Bakeshop
was the highest out of the others
while
the other bakeries were lower in the earlier period.
However
, as time went on, Amandine Bakery surpassed
Mari
Bakeshop
, becoming the highest. Looking closer, in the span of 6 years,
Mari
Bakeshop
get
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made
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the most profit, which peaked in 2001 and 2004 at slightly below $90.000, but
started
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from 2004 the amount dropped significantly.
Furthermore
, it continued the decreasing trend until the figure hit the lowest point in 2010, exactly
gained
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gaining
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$40.000
annualy
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annually
. The other shops did not get much
revenue
in the first 3 years. Even if the
revenue
of both shops was summed, it was just below the
Mari
Bakeshop
's
revenue
.
Although
it was low during the earlier period, in 2007 the
revenue
of both Bolo Cakery and Amandine Bakery rose considerably, and in 2008 it soared even higher. Both shops reached
its
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their
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peak
revenue
in 2010 which was slightly over $
100.000
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100,000
for Amandine and marginally over $60.000 for Bolo.
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