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Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students nd also ínpire their dreams. However, whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students, there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the ways. With this in mind, it is more advantagous to study at home. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

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,
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more people
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 for better education outside their nations. Many
students
 choose to acquire knowledge through studying abroad
while
 some others claim that studying in their
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home
countries
 is more advantageous. I am a strong advocate of studying in foreign lands, and I suppose it could possibly bring more benefits than studying at home. First
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 all, studying abroad helps
students
 to enhance more academic knowledge.
For instance
, America, China,
Japan
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 are the
countries
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 have strong development in the
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Technology
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, Science,
Engineering
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,…
that is
 why many
students
 from other
countries
 worldwide want to study in these
countries
 to gain more knowledge.
In addition
, in these
countries
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students
 have more chance to put theories into practice by working as an intern in a prominent company to improve their capabilities. On the other
hands
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, studying abroad is more beneficial in promoting social skills, which help youngsters to become more
self- motivation
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self-motivation
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 and improve communication skills.
This
 is necessary to communicate and integrate themselves into
international
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 environment through workshops or join in other group discussions.
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 that way,
students
 will be more confident when they have to confront
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different situations that need to use their own skills.
To sum up
, studying overseas brings more pros than cons for
students
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as well as
 looking for
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 jobs.
Therefore
,
students
 can take studying abroad into consideration in the future.
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