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In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

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Nowadays, there is a serious problem of juvenile delinquency in some countries, where teenagers significantly contribute to the local
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 rate.
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 essay will explore some reasons underlying the concern and possible solutions to address
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 issue.
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family and school communities are mostly responsible for law infringements by
children
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. The lack of positive role models frequently forces a child to commit a
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, because it seems the only way to be respected and loved.
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, if a student is exposed to abuse by parents or suffers from peer pressure, he or she will more probably break the law.
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,
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 from families, living below the poverty line, are inclined to commit minor offences
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 as shoplifting or car thefts in order to enhance their living conditions,
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 fashionable clothes or more quality food. Unfortunately, the benefits of
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 sometimes exceed the detrimental consequences for
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children
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. When it comes to solutions, the governments can defend juveniles from criminalization, ensuring them with opportunities for education and socialization.
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, free-of-charge sports centres, libraries, community centres, and other social facilities can provide young citizens with a variety of recreational activities, ways to communicate and even get a first job. They will find new hobbies, make friends and comprehend prospects for their bright future.
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, schools can organize lectures about crimes and invite criminals after their release to explain the aggravating circumstances of incarceration and reintegration into society in order to deter students from punishable misdeeds. In conclusion, teenagers often commit crimes
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 mental issues, connected to their nurture, or the quest for money.
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, the infrastructure development for education and interaction
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 increasing awareness of the human cost of
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 can spur
children
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 to grow up more law-abiding.
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task response
The essay provides a clear response to the task question, addressing both the reasons for teenage delinquency and possible solutions. Well done!
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs presenting reasons and solutions, and a conclusion. Some improvement could be made in linking the introduction and conclusion to the main points of the essay.
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