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Write a letter inviting your friend to a family function. Tell him/her: -What the occasion is -What your plans are -Why it is important he/she comes

#friend #function #-what #occasion #plans #-why
Hi John I'm inviting you to come over to my house next week on the 20th of October 2023. My family has a family reunion
ccasion
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occasion
.
This
 is the best time to meet my
families
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family
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 that you've
have'nt
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haven't
meat
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met
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them
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apply
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. The plan during that day will
be so organise
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, there is a time to BBQ,
swiming
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swimming
 at
the
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apply
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late and a theatre time too. I'm inviting you because you have a good talent
in
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 playing guitar. I want my family to see you play there and they can offer you a scholarship. One of my uncles, he is the famous musician and he has a lot of money. I know you've been looking for money to pay
you
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suition
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tuition
 fee.
A part
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 from that, you should have come to the party because is the only chance you have when you show up.
In addition
 to that,
i
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I
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 have a second cousin
she
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who
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 always
mention
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 you and she really
want
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wants
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 to meet you
asap
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ASAP
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. She heard from me that you are so talented
in
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at
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 playing
guitar
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the guitar
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. Plus
i've
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I've
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 shown her your video clip when we play at your home. I'm looking forward to
see
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seeing
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 you there and
give
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giving you
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 a call when you have other commitments. Thank you, Kind regards, Tokateti T
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coherence cohesion
Provide clearer and more organized structure for the letter. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter. Consider using 'Dear' followed by the recipient's name and 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully' for the closing.
coherence cohesion
Focus on one main idea per paragraph and provide supporting details.
task achievement
Ensure that the letter addresses all the required points from the prompt.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and professional tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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