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The charts below show the number of reasons why some people leave UK and why some people choose to stay. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the number of reasons why some people leave UK and why some people choose to stay. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts display the five aim why individuals would prefer to stay or leave Great Britain.
Overall
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, quality of life is the biggest reason why
people
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 would choose to stay or leave in the United Kingdom. The
weather
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 and financial resources had a great difference in both charts,
while
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 the others are relatively similar. The biggest reason why
people
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 wanted to leave the UK is because of the quality of life, with just above one-third of the
overall
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 share. The next biggest cause is the
weather
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, with 22%,
moreover
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, financial resources had just 2% less than the
weather
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. Employment and joining family and friends had the lowest proportions, with 15% and 9% respectively.
On the other hand
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, 40% of
people
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 wanted to stay in the United Kingdom because of the quality of life. Almost one-third of individuals would stay in the country because of financial resources.
Furthermore
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, employment only occupied 13% of the proportion, and the reasons for joining family and friends, and
weather
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 are the biggest losers with only 10% and 7% of
people
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 respectively taking them as the reason of why they would stay.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, weather with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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