18.The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

18.The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts below display the answers
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the
reason
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reasons
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why undergraduates and postgraduates decided to go to Vaster
university
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.
Overall
, reputation had the
highests
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highest
market share in both degrees, continued by the cost.
Personal
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recommendation
also
stands out in the case of
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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,
while
the other reasons are not really significant. In the undergraduate
students
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graph, 30% of individuals chose the university because of its reputation, and just under a quarter was because of the cost. The
thirds
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biggest
overall
share is
personal
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a personal
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recommendation
with one-fifth of the portion,
while
location
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is half of
personal
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the personal
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recommendation
. The motives of availability of accommodation and others
occupies
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9% and 7% respectively. About the questionnaire done with
th
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the
postgraduate,
reputation
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of Vaster University was the main reason, with 42%.
Moreover
, 36% was because of the cost. The other four
reason
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had only a small percentage,
which
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7%
belongs
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to
personal
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a personal
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recommendation
,
localtion
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location
and other reasons have 6% each, and the availability of accommodation is set as the biggest loser with only 3%.
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