18.The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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why undergraduates and postgraduates decided to go to Vaster

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stands out in the case of

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the other reasons are not really significant. In the undergraduate

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graph, 30% of individuals chose the university because of its reputation, and just under a quarter was because of the cost. The

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9% and 7% respectively. About the questionnaire done with

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of Vaster University was the main reason, with 42%.

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had only a small percentage,

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and other reasons have 6% each, and the availability of accommodation is set as the biggest loser with only 3%.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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18.The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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