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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
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The
given
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bar
graph
 delineates information related to
number
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a number
the number
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 of
magazines
 purchased
by
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apply
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per
person
 in five different
nation
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nations
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 in three distinct years
that are
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,
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 2003, 2005 and 2007. Looking from an
overalll
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overall
 perspective,
it is clear that
number
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a number
the number
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 of
sold
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the sold
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 magazine per citizen is
lowest
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the lowest
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 in
country
 E.
Country
 A, B and C share some
similarity
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similarities
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,
that is
graph
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a graph
the graph
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 for these countries are
declinig
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declining
dealing
 with time.
During
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In
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 2003,
country
 B
have
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has
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highest
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the highest
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magazines
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number of magazines
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 sold to one
person
 which accounts for 50. In
span
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the span
a span
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 of 2005,
magazines
 got abated to about 47 and to 45 till 2007 in
same
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the same
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 nation.
While
in
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apply
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country
 A is
second
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the second
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 largest
magazine selling
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magazine-selling
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 nation, still the
graph
 for
this
country
 is declining. In which about 45
magazines
 are sold during 2005, less than 45 in 2007 and more than
this
 in 2003.
Country
 C
also
 follows the same trend,
however
, the
values
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value
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 for
magazines
 per
person
 is less than 40 and
graph
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the graph
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declining
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decline
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 is at
lower
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a lower
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 rate. In
country
 D,
graph
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the graph
a graph
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 for
number
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a number
the number
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 of
magazines
 sold per
person
 is inclining and about
magazines
 are sold in , less than
this
 in 2003 and more during 2007.
Country
 E
have
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has
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 less than 10
magazines
 sold
in
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apply
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each year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, magazines, person, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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