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The number of internet users around the world has risen from just under two billion in 2010 to over five billion today. That is a rise from around 28% of the global population being online to almost 65%. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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There is no denying the fact that
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internet
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 has made a significant
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 in
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's lives,
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 it is a commonly held
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 that
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 users range happen to get
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huge increasing level in the past years, there is
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 it, in my opinion, I consider that most
people
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's work has moved to an online tools to make it more easier, and because of that, companies productivity rise
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 consideration that
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 have expressed various
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 solutions in order to improve their performance
in
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 work,
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 has become an essential part
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 our everyday
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,
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, we must face the fact that we should learn how to use
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 as an expert rather than fighting it,
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, it is perfect if we could take a
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 about how we could be better
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 users.
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 to consider that
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 we have to use the
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 one way or another, it is
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social research was published in the wall street journalist on the thirty – first of October twenty hundred
an
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 nine, which entitled "
internet
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 using", the research concluded that all worlds nations are going to develop a way to make their life remarkable by using the
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. In conclusion, despite
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 having different views, I consider that
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 increasing use is a huge benefit to
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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