Some people believe that elderly parents ought to live at senior homes. Other believe that they should live with family members. Do you agree or disagree?

Old family
members
require special care for their physical and mental health. There is a debate about where they should reside.
While
a group claims that elder
citizens
shall
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live with their families,
the
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others suggest that they should live in special "senior homes."
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special cases, it is essential for senior
citizens
to live with their immediate family
members
, simply because spouses,
children
, and in-laws usually provide better care, and
also
elder person
feels
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important around them. A relatively healthy family often gives a decent amount of love and care for their parents and grandparents, compared to senior compounds. The love between old and young
members
of a household builds up during the years they live together. They understand
eachothers
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each other's
traits and can cope with one another. An extended Iranian family,
for example
, usually lived together.
Members
of the family exchange love, and in
this
regard, seniors live their
last
20 or 30 years in peace and contentment. Older
citizens
are often healthy enough to participate in minor family actions or chores. Not only do they help with decisions and share their wisdom, but they can act as their
grand
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children
's babysitters. Take that Iranian extended family,
for instance
. Seniors used to look after
children
, tell stories to them, and even do the grocery
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, if healthy enough.
This
participation,
although
not great or financially significant, boosts their sense of importance and secures
children
's well-being. In conclusion, I deeply disagree with the notion of sending senior
citizens
to senior homes, because they are emotionally bound to their families, and they can still be beneficial and have
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role in their families.
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