Some people believe that elderly parents ought to live at senior homes. Other believe that they should live with family members. Do you agree or disagree?

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Old family
members
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require special care for their physical and mental health. There is a debate about where they should reside.
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a group claims that elder
citizens
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shall
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live with their families,
the
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others suggest that they should live in special "senior homes."
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special cases, it is essential for senior
citizens
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to live with their immediate family
members
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, simply because spouses,
children
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, and in-laws usually provide better care, and
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elder person
feels
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important around them. A relatively healthy family often gives a decent amount of love and care for their parents and grandparents, compared to senior compounds. The love between old and young
members
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of a household builds up during the years they live together. They understand
eachothers
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each other's
traits and can cope with one another. An extended Iranian family,
for example
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, usually lived together.
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of the family exchange love, and in
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regard, seniors live their
last
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20 or 30 years in peace and contentment. Older
citizens
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are often healthy enough to participate in minor family actions or chores. Not only do they help with decisions and share their wisdom, but they can act as their
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grandchildren's
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children
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's babysitters. Take that Iranian extended family,
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. Seniors used to look after
children
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, tell stories to them, and even do the grocery
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, if healthy enough.
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participation,
although
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not great or financially significant, boosts their sense of importance and secures
children
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's well-being. In conclusion, I deeply disagree with the notion of sending senior
citizens
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to senior homes, because they are emotionally bound to their families, and they can still be beneficial and have
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role in their families.
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