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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart illustrates the causes
to
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educate
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among
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the
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apply
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grown
man
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men
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.
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While the
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The
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 pie figure
presents
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shows
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 how
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the expences
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expences
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expenses
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 for
course
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the course
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 should be divided.
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, it can be clearly seen that "
intrest
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interest
 in
subject
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" is the main reason for most
of
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the
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apply
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workers to expand their knowledge.
Moreover
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 majority consider that
individual
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individuals
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 must mostly take
costs
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the costs
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 of the courses. It is interesting to note that "interest in
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the subjcet
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subjcet
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subject
" and "to gain qualifications" are the most common
aim
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aims
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 for the vast amount of adult people with 40% and 38 % respectively.
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 "helpful for current job" , "to improve prospects" and "enjoy studying" are roughly equal and account for around
fifth
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. There is actually a tiny popularity for "learning to
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 to change the work" and "to meet people" with only around 10% each. Regarding sharing costs, "individual " takes leadership with 40%.
While
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 "employer" stands at the second place with just over
third
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 of the graph , "taxpayer" owns just
fourth
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 of the chart.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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