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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart illustrates the causes
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educate
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among
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the
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grown
man
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.
While the
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 how
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the expences
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expences
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expenses
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 for
course
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the course
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 should be divided.
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, it can be clearly seen that "
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interest
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" is the main reason for most
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the
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workers to expand their knowledge.
Moreover
 majority consider that
individual
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individuals
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 must mostly take
costs
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the costs
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 of the courses. It is interesting to note that "interest in
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subjcet
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subject
" and "to gain qualifications" are the most common
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 for the vast amount of adult people with 40% and 38 % respectively.
Furthermore
 "helpful for current job" , "to improve prospects" and "enjoy studying" are roughly equal and account for around
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. There is actually a tiny popularity for "learning to
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 to change the work" and "to meet people" with only around 10% each. Regarding sharing costs, "individual " takes leadership with 40%.
While
 "employer" stands at the second place with just over
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 of the graph , "taxpayer" owns just
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 of the chart.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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