You are working for an international company and you would like to request time off for a family event. Write a letter to your boss Explaining what the celebration is Asking for the time off Explaining how you can get work done when you take time off

Dear Mr.Ali, I am writing
this
letter to request
to
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you
about
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approve 3 days off from work which is going to be held next week
begin
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on the 13 of October
due to
a family function . My older brother got married he will stay in the
homtown
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home town
during
wedding
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the wedding
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days after that he will leave
to
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United
State
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to complete his education with his wife as I am part of
family
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the family
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member my duties
to
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help
older
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my older
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sister and mother with regard to wedding arrangements .
Moreover
, As I mentioned in
this
letter my brother wants to get
bachelor’s
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a bachelor’s
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degree in
United
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the United
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state
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I am not able to see him
a
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while
therefore
, I want to stay with him during that time. Regarding my duties I am going to carry my labtob
also
I have access
in
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the system I will take care
about
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my
responsibility
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during that time
also
I will contact
to
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you. Kind regards ,
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task achievement
Clearly state the purpose of the letter and provide necessary details about the celebration.
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Use appropriate and professional language throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize the content of the letter in a more coherent and cohesive manner.
coherence cohesion
Use a formal greeting and closing in the letter.
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Clearly express how you plan to handle your responsibilities while taking time off.
lexical resource
Improve your use of vocabulary and sentence structures.
grammatical range and accuracy
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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