It has been proved that smoking kills. In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in public places except in certain areas. All countries should make these rules. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

According to
more and more medical research has been made nowadays,
people
starting to believe that smoking is harmful. Some nation has introduced laws to ban
people
smoking in public places. I
was
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about
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point, because of
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side-product harm.
Although
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some
people
believe the limit
deprive
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human rights. They
though
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it's
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a
basical
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basic
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for
people
to smoke in public areas. As
government
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, they should not
taking anykinds
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of limitation
about
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smoking. But I believe that human rights indicate that
people
have
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not to do sth,
there
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ideas
was
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not on
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. If
people
really have th
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