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in the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because thay will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
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modern society, it is always debatable whether
people
 should read everything online without paying, some argue that smartphones do actually make our lives more convenient,
others
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 think that authors have the right to charge for their creativity. Under essay will discuss
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this
 topic. First of all, with the astonishing invention,
smartphone
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the smartphone
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, that Steve Jobs came up with,
people
 nowadays are enabled to get all
kind
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 of information instantly,
that is
 to say, the searching
engine
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 or social media are powerful enough to let you immediately keep up with the society.
Second,
the rapid advance of technologies is a
double-side
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 sword. The entire human society is getting more and more comfortable which is undeniable,
however
, the
legislations
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 and laws aren’t progressing
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 the same speed as the technologies do.
Therefore
, it is easy for
people
 to spread or to read the free copies of the real ones.
Last
 but not least,
due to
 the intuition of
human
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,
people
 are willing to get things free
instead
 of paying for
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,
hence
, with the combination of sky-rocketing growing technologies and the regulations chasing behind, it is somehow unstoppable for
the
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us to support the authors,
in other words
, the punishment of violating the rules is barely zero.
However
, some still enjoy the romance of flipping books or
newspaper
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newspapers
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 on their hand with a cup of coffee
in
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 the beginning of the day. Not to
mentioned
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 the elders
which
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 still account
of
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 most of the population in some nations might not be as capable as teenagers in using
smartphone
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.
To sum up
, I think the difficulty of reaching information online is
undoubtable
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undoubtedly
 getting easier if the institutes which set laws aren’t responsible for their occupations, it is imaginable that free copies spreading around the world.
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