The diagram shows how chocolate is produced

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According to

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the diagram, which illustrates how chocolate is manufactured.

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, the chocolate is produced in 10 steps.

To begin

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with , the cocoa is grown in South America,Africa and Indonesia.

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, the process

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when the crops are riped and become red pods.

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, the pods are harvested and the white cocoa

beans

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are taken. In the third

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, the white cocoa

bean

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beans

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are fermented

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spread and dried in the sun. In the next

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, the dry

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are packed in sacks. In

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two Steph,the large sacks are taken to

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by train or lorry. After that, the

beans

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are roasted

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35C . In

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number 9, the roasted

beans

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are crushed and the outer shell is removed.

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, the inner part is pressed and it

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a liquid chocolate. In

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number 8 the

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are hotter than all the other steps. In all steps

beans

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are solid white in

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the final

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step

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it is liquid

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The diagram shows how chocolate is produced

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

fast food has become cheaper in recent years. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Directors of organzations receive much higher salaries than ordinary workers. Some think it is necessary, while ther think it is unfair. Discuss both view and give your opinion.